教你写出漂亮英文句子（1）

越努力，越幸运。...



从今天开始，视老师的眼睛好坏，定期在这个公共账号上写《教你写出漂亮的英文句子》。希望喜欢写作的你，不仅仅记住的是结构，是思路，同时也会真的写出一个完整的地道句子。毕竟，我们不能用小学生的句子写出列夫托尔斯泰的思想。

CHAPTER ONE  删繁就简，显简洁之美

例句点评：

Wordy:Liu bin is employed at a TV station working as a news reporter.

Better：1.Liu works at a T.V. station as a news reporter.

2.Liu is a news reporter at a T.V. station

3.Liu is a T.V. news reporter.

解析：原句中的is employed 为被动语态，且与work as 重复，可进行合并。一般情况下，主动语态表意更为直接和清晰。因此这里使用主动语态更好。具体修改见1.如果调整语序，先表明“a news reporter"的身份，则可以省去动词

work，使句子进一步简化，详见句2.进一步看，“at a T.V. station"和“as a news reporter" 在意思上还有重合的部分，可以进一步删繁就简，合并为：

“a T.V. news reporter.”

Wordy:This book will help you master the basic elements of good writing.

Better：This book will help you master the basics of good writing.

解析：原句中存在，basic element 这个重复之处。直接简化为 basics即可。类似的还有：fundamental principles 和essential components都可以简化成

fundamentals和essentials

Wordy:It makes me feel painful to think that she has to work 12hours a day

and seven days a week.

Better:It pains me to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven

days a week

解析：短句结构：“it makes sb feel +形容词”中，形容词可以用其动词形式来替换。表达为it +及物动词＋sb的形式。类似的结构还有很多，比如：it makes

me feel sad/cheeful.都可以表达为：it saddens me/it cheers me.

Wordy:The search of the forest that theyconducted was entirely complete.

Better:1.The search of the forest was complete.

2.they coonducted a complete search of the forest.

解析：原句存在两个问题：1.the search of the forest 不需要再加动词

conducted。2.entirely多余。complete本身就已经有“完全的”之意了。再加

entirely意思重复。两种改法：1.删去多余的部分，如better1.2.将被动语态变为主动语态。如句2.类似的句子还有：the task that they performed was

completely finished,可改为the task was complete 或they finished the task。

Wordy:He has no sense of principles whether he isin public or in private.

Better:He has no principles,public or private.

解析：一提到“。。。感”“。。。意识”。大多数中国学生的第一感觉就是将其翻译为：“sense of".事实上，要想让句子更加简练，我们可以去掉the sense of.直接表达为 no principles.另外，原句中的后半句whether he is in public or in

private ,可以进行简化。直接表达为：public or private.类似的结构还有：

whether in black or in white 变成：black or white.whether in theory or in

practice,可以简化为 in theory or in practice.

Wordy:As an accountant,I do not agree with people using company money

that is not preauthorized.

Better: 1.As an accountant, I disapprove of using company funds not

pre-authorized.

2.As an accountant,I disapprove of using unauthorized company

funds.

3.as an accountant,I dispute with people using  unauthorized

company  funds.

解析：原句中的do not 结构，可以使用否定含义的词进行替换，会显得句子简练很多。英语中很多词本身就具有否定意义，比如：lack,rarely,barely等。这里的do not agree 可以换成：disapprove of/dispute with 表示不同意。类似的表达还有很多，比如：do not have sufficient financial backing 可以直接写：lack financial backing/ patients do not often experience side effects. 可以直接写：patients rarely experience side effects.另外，表示公司的钱时，

company funds更为地道。用unauthorized company funds代替定语从句，可以使句子变简洁。

Wordy:When kids do not have discipline at their school, it means they do not have discipline in the home.

Better: Absence of discipline in the school reflects absence of discipline in

the home

解析：同上。可以使用否定含义的词absence去替代，do not have这个词组。另外，删除when引导的状语从句，改用reflect 使得句子变得简洁。

今天就讲到这里吧。希望看完整篇文章的你，会有所收获。记得做笔记哟。

联系JUNO:

手机：18621289905

微信：weian_0905

一个努力生活的。小孩儿。

    关注 allwaystudy