【英语写作】怎样写出一篇满分记人叙事类作文
记叙文是以叙述人物的经历或事物发展变化的过程为主的一种文体，在高考书面表达中，记人叙事是比较基础的一种考查方...
从近几年高考英语试题看，（提纲类）记人叙事在高考书面表达中占有很重的分量。写作时要注意：
1.在写作记人类记叙文时，要根据题干中所给的提示信息来写，不得随意增添或遗漏要点，要根据写作主题突出人物的性格或经历等重要信息，切忌要点堆砌，中心不明。
2.在写作叙事类记叙文时，要理清事件发生的时间、地点、人物、起因、经过及结果，确定好表达要点，注意表达的完整性，注意上下文的衔接。
真题例析
一家英语报社向中学生征文，主题是“十年后的我”。请根据下列要求和你的畅想完成短文。1.家庭
2.工作
3.业余生活
注意：1.词数100左右；
2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3. 开头语已为你写好。
I often imagine what my life will be like in the future.
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思路点拨
本文的话题是“十年后的我”，要求考生充分发挥自己的想象力，从家庭、工作和业余生活来想象十年以后的自己。文章宜采用将来时和第一人称。考生在写作时要灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来，注意主次分明，详略得当。语言力求准确、简洁。根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性。文章可以分为三部分来写：
第一部分——引入话题：开头语“I often imagine what my life will be like in the future.”意为“我常常想，在将来我的生活会是什么样的”，紧接着引入十年后的自己这一话题。
第二部分——组织要点：从家庭、工作和业余生活三方面来具体描述自己未来的生活，为使上下文连接更紧密可适当加入细节。
第三部分——升华主题：将正文中描述的畅想与现实进行对接，升华主题。
学生习作
I often imagine what my life will be like in the future. I will be 28 years old in ten years. I think that I will have a good life. ①I will have a boyfriend or a wife/husband.
Ten years later I will get a good job. I will work hard until my dream comes true. I will become a doctor and help lots of patient to decrease their pains. ②I will stay with many family on the weekend, and we will go climbing.
In the future, I think I will have a beautiful life，so I need to study hard at present.
I often imagine what my life will be like in the future. I will be 28 years old in ten years. I think that I will have a good life. ①I will have a boyfriend or a wife/husband.
Ten years later I will get a good job. I will work hard until my dream comes true. I will become a doctor and help lots of patient to decrease their pains. ②I will stay with many family on the weekend, and we will go climbing.
In the future, I think I will have a beautiful life，so I need to study hard at present.
名师点评
1.第一段第二、第三句为两个短句，且表达平淡，用词无亮点，将其改为：I will be 28 years old in ten years and I believed that I will have a wonderful life.
2.①表述过于简单，改为：I will have a boyfriend or will have been married to my lover with a lovely child.这样语意更加丰富，亮点突出。
3.第二段前三句句式单调，内容不够丰富，毫无亮点，改为：Ten years later I hope I’ll work in a hospital as a doctor. I’ll enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues. I’ll do a good job in whatever I do.
4.②与上文之间无过渡，且内容不够充实，改为：In my free time, I’ll continue to take regular exercise, such as swimming, running and various ball games. On my holidays, I’ll travel around the world.
1.第一段第二、第三句为两个短句，且表达平淡，用词无亮点，将其改为：I will be 28 years old in ten years and I believed that I will have a wonderful life.
2.①表述过于简单，改为：I will have a boyfriend or will have been married to my lover with a lovely child.这样语意更加丰富，亮点突出。
3.第二段前三句句式单调，内容不够丰富，毫无亮点，改为：Ten years later I hope I’ll work in a hospital as a doctor. I’ll enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues. I’ll do a good job in whatever I do.
4.②与上文之间无过渡，且内容不够充实，改为：In my free time, I’ll continue to take regular exercise, such as swimming, running and various ball games. On my holidays, I’ll travel around the world.
满分范文
I often imagine what my life will be like in the future. Together family, job and leisure life mostly make up my imagination, haunting in my mind every now and then.To begin with, I will surely have a cheerful and harmonious family. It is acknowledged by many that one’s family is the source of happiness. I have long been dreaming of having a wonderful marriage partner and several lovely kids.
As for my career, there is no doubt that I desire to be a teacher. So grateful I feel for the guidance of many outstanding teachers that I am willing to be one of them in my future.
Finally, I hope that I can enjoy every single day of my life. In other words, I want a perfect balance between work and recreation.
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