【干货】为什么语法正确写作还是拿不了高分？

上次的干货中，我们讲了句子的结构，包括简单句以及复杂句。通过上次的学习，我们应该会写“语法正确”的句子。x0ax0a今天我们通过一些例子来讲一下，如何写漂亮的句子。...





上次的干货中，我们讲了句子的结构，包括简单句以及复杂句。通过上次的学习，我们应该会写“语法正确”的句子。今天我们通过一些例子来讲一下，如何写漂亮的句子。

1.如果是地位同等重要的句子，不要用从句， 链接两个独立的句子，千万不能用逗号隔开，连接的方法如下：

1） 用and, but, or, nor, so, for, yet 这7个连接词链接；

2） 用分号隔开后面往往跟moreover, furthermore, therefore, or however或者 for example, in other words, or as a matter of fact 这样的短语结构。

2. 如果两个句子表达的思想不是同等重要，主要的思想要放在主句上，次要的思想放在从句上面，用引导词引导（点击查看上期的从句讲解）

大家来看下面的两个句子，如果主从句互换，意思重心是不一样的

Social networking Web sites offer ways for people to connect in the virtual world. They do not replace face-to-face social interaction.

连接方案一 （重点在主句）

Although they do not replace face-to-face social interaction, social networking Websites offer ways for people to connect in the virtual world.

连接方案二（重点在主句）

Although social networking Web sites offer ways for people to connect in the virtualworld, they do not replace face-to-face social interaction.

3. 英语中有一个精简原则，如果可以用一个单词表达的时候，就不要用两个单词。同理，如果可以用一个句子表达的，就不要分两个句子，大家看下下面的句子如何修改，为什么这么修改？

The Parks Department keeps the use of insecticides to a minimum. The city isconcerned about the environment.

The Parks Department keeps the use of insecticides to a minimum because the thecity is concerned about the environment.

4. 有的时候学生写句子的时候，会不断地用“and”来链接句子，导致一些可以放在从句上的内容也放在主句上去讲了，主从不分，导致文章不达意，大家看看下面的而句子，怎么修改，为什么这么修改？

Closets were taxed as rooms, and most colonists stored their clothes in chests or clothespresses.

Because closets were taxed as rooms, most colonists stored their clothes in chests or clothespresses.  这句话之所以好，是因为它把因果关系表达得更加明确，达意。

5.主次不要颠倒，大家看看下面的句子怎么修改，为什么这么修改？

Harry S. Truman, who was the unexpected winner of the 1948 presidential election, defeated Thomas E. Dewey.

Harry S. Truman, who defeated Thomas E. Dewey, was the unexpected winner of the 1948 presidential election.

练习（如何修改）：

I wasd riving home from my new job, heading down Ranchitos Road, when my car suddenly overheated.

6.不要过分堆叠从句，一般从句中不要再加从句。大家看下下面的句子，怎么来修改：

In Animal Liberation, Peter Singer argues that animals possess nervous systems andcan feel pain, and that he therefore believes that “the ethical principle onwhich human equality rests requires us to extend equal consideration to animals” (1).[ps. 这是MLA格式的引用方法]

In Animal Liberation, Peter Singer argues that animals possess nervous systems andcan feel pain, and therefore he believes that “the ethical principle onwhich human equality rests requires us to extend equal consideration to animals” (1).

Reference：

Sommers, Nancy, and Diana Hacker. A Writer’s Reference (7th ed.). Boston: Bedford/St. Martin’s, 2011. Print.

下回我们讲解句子结构多样化！Saty tuned!

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