【干货】如何写漂亮有效的句子（五）

本系列文章针对的群体：x0ax0a1. 考ACT/SAT的同学x0a2. 在英美上高中，每周都要写essay的同学x0a3. 申请完毕，马上大一开学的学生...



本系列文章针对的群体：

1. 考ACT/SAT的同学
2. 在英美上高中，每周都要写essay的同学
3. 申请完毕，马上大一开学的学生

前四期我们讲了（点击链接进行回顾）：

1. 平行结构
2. 缺词
3. 修饰成分位置错乱
4. 转换

今天我们五分钟的主题是：结构混搭（Mixed Construction），英语句子的基本结构是有限的（可以参考这篇文章），你在写句子的时候，不能够毫无征兆的进行不同结构的混搭，这样会导致出现语法或者逻辑的错误，所以在写句子的时候，首先要想好要表达什么，然后选择合适的句型结构再下笔，不然写着写着会出现下面的句子：

1. For most drivers who have a blood alcohol level of .05 percent double their risk of causing an accident.

这句话一开始的时候，是一个介词短语，但是写着写着就把这个介词短语作为主语了（这是不可以的，主语必须是名词性质的），大家看看怎么修改 （答案在文末）？

更多类似的错误，大家看看如何修改：

2. When the country elects a president is the most important responsibility in a democracy.

3. Although the United States is one of the wealthiest nations in the world, but more than twelve million of our children live in poverty.

对中国学生来说，还有一个难点就是英语中的句子，主语和谓语之间一定要有逻辑，不要受到中文翻译的影响，大家看看下面的句子问题在哪里。

4. We decided that Tiffany’s welfare would not be safe living with her mother.

5. Under the revised plan, the elderly, who now receive a double personal exemption, will be abolished.

6. The tax accountant, a very lucrative profession, requires intelligence, patience, and attention to mathematical detail.

另外写句子的时候，要避免 “is when” "is where" "reason...is because" 这样的结构，大家看看下面的句子怎么改：

7. The reason the experiment failed is because conditions in the lab were not sterile.

8. Anorexia nervosa is where people think they are too fat and diet to the point of starvation.

答案：

1. 修改方案一 （主语加黑，谓语另外颜色标出）：For most drivers who have a blood alcohol level of .05 percent,the risk of causing an accident is doubled.

修改方案二：Most drivers who have a blood alcohol level of .05 percent double their risk of causing an accident.

2.Electing a president is the most important responsibility in a democracy.

3. 去掉 but，因为but 的作用是连接两个单独的句子，但是这个句子中although连接的是个让步状语从句，必须要依附在主句上面。

4. We decided thatTiffany would not be safe living with her mother. （是Tiffany的认识安全，而不是她的健康的安全，主谓逻辑要说得通）。

5. Under the revised plan,the double personal exemption for the elderly will be abolished.

6.Tax accounting, a very lucrative profession, requires intelligence, patience, and attention to mathematical detail. (accounting 是职业，accountant是人)。

7. The experiment failed because conditions in the lab were not sterile.

8. Anorexia nervosa is a disorder suffered by people who think they are too fat and diet to the point of starvation.

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Reference：

Sommers, Nancy, and Diana Hacker. A Writer’s Reference (7th ed.). Boston: Bedford/St. Martin’s, 2011. Print.我们公众号的Logo换了哦，萌萌哒！

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